Opinion -- Checking hair a student in M.2

[toon40-29]

The girl student hairstyle as an example of the school is if long hair tie to grab in the back.  If  short hair pick to wear the ears or stick the hairpin order lily.  By last year.  school way gives  every girl student degree student prohibits to have a pony tail.  because wrong the set  of regulations of the school. But this year school way can give a student M.2 can have a pony tail because a student has who to ever have a pony tail has come to already someone can not cut can correct. Already school way has will checking unifrom - hairstyle of each degree back student has standing in row respects the national flag. My opinion is I think  school way has checking unifrom - hairstyle of a student  M.2 are the good.  because the student  who cut wrong regulations hairstyle will must get back to correct the hairstyle of  oneself are correct make don't bump against deduct marks but the opinion about a teacher who  check hairstyle of girl student.  I think a teacher will should listen the reason of a  student.  such  as a student will who is a half caste may has will the colour of hair is brown.  a  teacher should  not go to that a student is that dye hair me comes to should listen from student reason before.

[TBob]

Toon,

This is very good, but we need to work together very much to get this article written correctly!

I think you don't mean the haircut of a horse, but a pony tail.  Check out http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ponytail

Lets get started with these changes:

1. only one space between words.  two spaces after a period (.)

Please make change 1. and then we'll start getting your very good opinion ready for the newspaper, OK!

Again, very good work!!!
T. Bob

[TBob]

Toon,

I'll say it again.  Please make these changes.  Then I will give you the grammar corrections.

1. Only one space between words.  Two spaces after a period (.)

2.  I think you don't mean the haircut of a horse, but a pony tail.  Check out http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ponytail