Nam,

You are writing about the same topic as Tammy....not good, you need different topics!!!!!!!!

Tammy and Nam...you both are writing about the same thing!!!!!!!  Not good!

You need to write more Nam.  What sports do you think Satit Ram might win the gold medal?  Who are some of the Satit Ram superstars that will compete in the Satit Ram games?

Toon,

This is very good, but we need to work together very much to get this article written correctly!

I think you don't mean the haircut of a horse, but a pony tail.  Check out http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ponytail

Lets get started with these changes:

1. only one space between words.  two spaces after a period (.)

Please make change 1. and then we'll start getting your very good opinion ready for the newspaper, OK!

Again, very good work!!!
T. Bob

          Now!! I talking about my family. I'm Arm. My older sister ,her name is som. She's 29 year old. Sha stay in Songkhla. She works at the hotel. But I can't remember its name. And my younger sister,her name is oil. She study in Satit-Ram, like me!! She 12 year old.
         
          My father's name Gowet. He works at Songkhla,like my sister. He is a duty.
      My mother's name Ratana. My mom's housewife.
         
          My mother has six sisters . My mom is the older sister.And my dad, He has nine sister .My dad is the younger brother.
         
          My farther's parent is *----*and *----* they leave in Lakse. And my mom's parent is *---* and *---* they leave in the paradisaic.

                                                                              Have a good day!!
                                                                                     Mr.Bob

The girl student hairstyle as an example of the school is if long hair tie to grab in the back.  If  short hair pick to wear the ears or stick the hairpin order lily.  By last year.  school way gives  every girl student degree student prohibits to have a pony tail.  because wrong the set  of regulations of the school. But this year school way can give a student M.2 can have a pony tail because a student has who to ever have a pony tail has come to already someone can not cut can correct. Already school way has will checking unifrom - hairstyle of each degree back student has standing in row respects the national flag. My opinion is I think  school way has checking unifrom - hairstyle of a student  M.2 are the good.  because the student  who cut wrong regulations hairstyle will must get back to correct the hairstyle of  oneself are correct make don't bump against deduct marks but the opinion about a teacher who  check hairstyle of girl student.  I think a teacher will should listen the reason of a  student.  such  as a student will who is a half caste may has will the colour of hair is brown.  a  teacher should  not go to that a student is that dye hair me comes to should listen from student reason before.

        Fai Khum Game is the games for all of the Satit schools.  Every year each school will take turn hosting the game.  This year The Demonstration Of Ramkhamhaeng is the host of the game.  It is called 'Fai Khum Game' because 'Fai Khum' is the flower of the school.  Each  Satit school will select athlete to complete in the game. We are very excited about the game this year. Everyone of us has some participations in the game.  Some parents also participate by donating money for the game. We even have computer program to report the results online.  We wish we will collect the most medals this year.

Nam,

I think I understand this and I think this is a good article.  Could you change the words to make it easier for your friends to read?

New Topic..(Wednesday 16/7/08 News)